Moments, you know the kind

I have been a bad blog-keeper-upper/website-updater, haven’t I. What can I use as my excuse? Growing another year older? Kitchen renovations and the running around after plumbers, electricians, builders, and delivery people this brings with it?

How about lying face-down in the revision muck? Yes, that will do nicely.

Today, I had a moment. One of those you only find in revising a first draft. When you come to a sentence and no matter how hard you stare at it, poke at it, bash it over the metaphorical head with the metaphorical blunt instrument, you just can’t work out what on earth you were trying to say. Those moments of wtf?

For your entertainment: “She snapped shut over her cried as soon as my light touched her.”

See. Wtf?

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  1. *giggle*

    Sounds like you lost a few words in that sentence.

  2. And maybe the plot 😀

  3. Makes perfect sense – if you put a semi-colon after ‘her’, and ‘she’ is an intelligent, giant clam, with a woman in its mouth, who has been waiting for a light to signal some very sad news.

  4. Bwahahaha! I love that idea :p

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